WRITING FOR TELEVISION
This page will consist of my scriptwriting work and my "Writing for Television" project.
My Original Character:
Name: Bobby Blake / Comedy Killer
Age: 21
Background: Raised by posh and hard to please parents who he left behind when he turned 18, always obsessed with death from a young age due to abandonment and neglect.
Occupation: Detective
Desires: Murder
Health: Weirdly perfect, high IQ
Hobbies: Writing
Social Life: Occasionally speaks to colleagues however, will never go out celebrating after a case or meet them after work for drinks.
Quirks: Murderer at night and solves his own crimes, very comedic and sarcastic. Writes a note to whoever finds the body with a bad joke which are found inside Christmas crackers.
"The Master Office" Scene Script:
For this task, we were given two characters and a setting. The two characters being Leo, the student, and Mr. Briggs, the headmaster. It was up to ourselves to create the universe around the characters while including the office setting. We also were able to choose the two character's personalities. My choices for Leo were to make him a 16-year-old student in his final year of secondary school. He is unbothered, airheaded and humorous. Mr. Briggs is a 51-year-old headmaster who is sarcastic, slack and miserable.
The reason for choosing these two personalities together was because I had the idea of the teacher being very fed-up of his career and life around him, destroying all of his energy to deal with the troublemaker, Leo. Due to his airheaded personality, Leo is very humorous to the viewer as he tends to reveal information he shouldn't say in front of the headmaster, use slang and create nicknames despite being in a professional environment. These two personalities clash and create a comedy of Leo's bold and comedic personality taking advantage of Mr. Briggs non-existent and tired personality.
The reason why I chose the office style of it being very orderly and clean was because due to Mr. Briggs' personality being very laid-back, he won't have the energy to make it messy or decorate it.
Overall, this task introduced me to the layout of scriptwriting and how to set them out for future projects. It also taught me that despite scripts being very heavily dialogue focused, it still requires a lot of description to describe the character's personality and appearance and the setting around them.
Research and Ideas Development:
Analysis of Two Scripts from BBC Writer’s Room:
Casualty – Series 31, Episode 44 – “One” (one shot episode) Paul Unwin – TV DRAMA
http://downloads.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/scripts/Casualty-S31-Ep44-One.pdf
This script written by Paul Unwin seems to have multiple different storylines all in one place. The first storyline we get introduced to Jez and Iain, paramedics at house fire, searching for victims. They find Sun-mi, a Korean mother who speaks very little English. We know this on page 1 as Jez says “Do you speak English? What’s your name? Miss?” and Sun-mi responds in Korean “I want my daughter”, which is a completely different response to the question (Unwin, n.d, p. 1). The climax of this scene is when Sun-mi eventually speaks English and the two paramedics have already evacuated from the burning house with her. Sun-mi reveals the devastating news “Baby. In. House.”, leaving Jez and Iain in shock (Unwin, n.d, p. 3).
After the opening titles, the show resumes inside the ambulance which Iain driving, and Jez tending to Sun-mi in the back. While Jez is trying to keep Sun-mi’s vitals stable and gather information, Iain has had to emergency stop due to a motorcycle accident involving an 18-year-old called Chrissie Cox. This begins another storyline which will eventually connect with the main one. After calling him an ambulance, Iain, Jez, and Sun-mi carry on rushing to the emergency department of the hospital.
After they arrive at the hospital, we are introduced to two more characters who work at the hospital, Charlie, and Robyn. We are also introduced to Chloe Robinson, a 17-year-old girl who we eventually find out she’s with a student from her school (whose name is Diamond) for a work experience day, observing doctors and nurses. We find out that Jez is very caring and stressed about the baby who was in the burning house due to him repeating questions again like “Anyone said anything about the baby?” (Unwin, n.d, p. 8). Jez is ignored as Charlie and Robyn are too focused on finding out as much information about the patient as possible. It shows the trolley moving towards the doors into the hospital with the doctors and paramedics.
We are then introduced to Diamond Whittaker, another 17-year-old student, who seems more pretentious and stuck up than Chloe does as she has an “expensive top” on for a Work Experience trip at the hospital and has showed up late (Unwin, n.d, p. 9). In the conversation between Duffy, Diamond and Chloe, Duffy, the doctor, asks the question “So you both want to be nurses?” and we find out that Diamond’s mum believes she would be a better consultant and we also find out that Chloe would “like to help people. In some capacity. To make the world better.” (Unwin, n.d, p. 10, p. 11). This again suggests that she is more compassionate than her friend, Diamond.
After a short conversation between the two teenage girls and some employees, we meet a patient waiting to be examined, Jerry, with his daughter, Candice-Marie. Jerry stated he was feeling odd, and this is its own separate storyline along with main one. Moving on, we meet another patient, Rose Thomas, “An agitated older woman” who is “confused, frequently homeless, known around the ED” (Unwin, n.d, p. 16). During this time, we find out that Chloe is squeamish, and has “fainted in Biology” (Unwin, n.d, p. 17). Rose and Max are quite comedic characters compared to other patients and characters in the script suggested by Max saying “Rose, you know I can’t marry you. Of course, I fancy you it’s just I don’t have the stamina anymore.” (Unwin, n.d, p. 17).
We return with the first storyline, and we find out from Sun-mi that she has a contactable husband named Sully. We also find out that Jez has begun to panic and is falling behind everyone else. We know this as Connie, a doctor, says “Jez, can you get a grip?” (Unwin, n.d, p. 19). We also find out despite being told to wait outside, Diamond and Chloe have entered the room with working doctors and a patient, invading the patient’s privacy. When told that they shouldn’t be there, each girl has a different reaction. Chloe “looks at her feet, appalled” and Diamond “smiles” (Unwin, n.d, p. 19). This suggests again that Chloe cares about the opportunity she has been given and Diamond is more of a troublemaker that will do whatever she wants to if she’s interested.
Jez is eventually moved away from a manic work area and into the staff room to gather himself again. This is where Jacob says, “They got the baby out.” Which calms and relieves Jez’s mind as he celebrates saying “Yes, get in there!” (Unwin, n.d, p. 23). However, we also find out something interesting. The fire wasn’t an accident, and it was in fact an attempted murder through arson.
The camera returns to reception, introducing us to another character who is a patient. Their name is Dougie Cox, and he is 47 years old, Chrissie Cox’s uncle who was introduced earlier as the 18-year-old boy in a motorcycle accident. Dougie is “in full neck brace on a spinal board” which suggests something awful happened to him as well as Chrissie, his “brother’s boy” (Unwin, n.d, p. 25, p. 26). We then find out he was also in a motorcycle accident.
A doctor, Dylan, asks Dougie “You smell of petrol, why is that?” and Dougie’s response is “I work with secondhand cars. Always filling and draining them…” (Unwin, n.d, p. 32). The reason why he smells like petrol will go onto become false as the story develops. We also find out that Dougie may be paralyzed as Dougie doesn’t feel Dylan scratch his hand.
Diamond and Chloe are in the staff room with Jacob and Iain. They know from a previous phone call that the baby from the house fire didn’t make it, however Diamond doesn’t pick up on the fact that it’s a private matter and blurts out “You’re Jez, I’m so sorry.” after Jez walks into the room (Unwin, n.d, p. 39). This confuses Jez and to make matters worse, Chrissie bursts into the staff room as an attempt to hide from Sully, the man grieving the loss of his baby, Stella. Sully comes in screaming “You killed my baby!” in which Chrissie replies in terror “It was Uncle Dougie’s idea, Sully. He said he wanted to scare you; I swear.” (Unwin, n.d, p. 40). This shows that the culprit of the murder was Dougie and Chrissie Cox, and the victims were Sully, Sun-mi, and Stella. Sully is in despair and can’t bare to face his wife. Jez feels all the guilt on his shoulders and wants to do nothing but apologize to the family for not saving Stella, the baby. We find out that Dougie Cox, the man involved with the arson and murder crimes has a partner called Di, who is 8 months pregnant.
After returning back into reception, Jerry, the man who felt odd and is with his daughter, starts having a stroke in the waiting room. Attention arises to him immediately to save his life. Di also finds out that Dougie could be potentially paralyzed as she finally sees him in the RESUS room.
The story ends with Sully in confusion, anger and grief shouting at Dougie for killing his child and almost killing his wife over an argument. Jez apologizes to the family however Sun-mi is uninterested, whereas Sully is grateful that his wife is here too, and he didn’t lose both of them.
The script ends with dialogue for the production as it shows a voice over of the two 17-year-old girls who supervised the work and understanding that the job can be awful yet so rewarding but they do it to save lives and the community.
I liked that the chosen script was very easily set out, making it more accessible to read as well as all the characters were described with their part and occasionally a description. I would love to build up tension, suspense and show emotion as well as this script does in my own script.
Beep – Series 1 Episode 1 – “Anniversary” – Bryce Hart – TV COMEDY
https://downloads.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/scripts/beep-pilot-script.pdf
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The script brings us into a hospital at night, with a “soft, rhythmic noise of a ventilator.” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 2). Tommy is a 70-year-old man, currently in a coma and by his side is Liz, who is in his 60s. We can suggest that Liz is his wife has she “holds his hand and strokes his hair” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 2). We are also introduced to Martin who is in his 30s. We can tell that they have loving family and friends around them as they have “Get Well Soon and Sympathy cards” around them as well as “family photos” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 2).
The dialogue begins as Liz pressures Martin into telling a joke, in which he struggles to come up with a good one. Martin stupidly says, “Knock Knock.” In which Liz replies “Well, not a knock knock one, he can’t do the other part-“ (Hart, B, n.d, p. 2). This is the first bit of comedy we see. Martin goes onto tell his joke, and Liz comforts his attempt by saying that Tommy would be laughing his head off if he was awake. The scene ends with a moment between Liz and Martin with optimism that constant communication is what is going to bring Tommy back to reality. We see in this scene that Liz is trying her best to be optimistic, and Martin is awkward and believes the worst is going to happen.
We change location to outside the hospital, where we are introduced to Hannah, “a woman in her 30s who looks like she hasn’t slept for a week” who is about to enter the hospital before noticing a patient smoking (Hart, B, n.d, p. 3). She takes a drag from the cigarette, relieving some of her stress. She thanks them and then enters the hospital.
We return back inside Tommy’s hospital room to Liz speaking to Tommy about having an anniversary party despite him being in a coma. Liz goes on explaining the plans for the anniversary party while Martin is confused for Tommy and himself. Martin messes up and says to Liz “it’s not like we spoke that much when he was alive-“ in response to Liz’s question “Why can’t you just talk to him like normal?” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 6). They both exit the room away from Tommy to discuss what was just said.
After their discussion, Liz realizes it was a sad mistake and returns back into the room. We see Becky, she is in her early 30s and is “shy and smiley” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 7). They begin having an awkward conversation, which the viewer learns that her mum is in a coma too. Becky hands a tub of homemade “Cherry Bakewells” to Martin which gives the impression that Becky bakes a lot for people around her (Hart, B, n.d, p. 8). Their cringe and awkward conversation ends leaving Martin wishing he spoke more.
The scene has changed again to a hospital toilet, where we meet Hannah again, “drinking straight Gin, preparing herself for what’s coming” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 9). She tries to get up and go but fails, and then receives a message from Danny (potential partner), which is nothing but cringe. It drives her to drink again. She hears a woman crying in the cubicle next to her and offers her the whole gin bottle – she has another one in her bag.
We meet Nigel, “40s, scruffy and fragile”, Liz and Tommy’s Nephew who gifts them an Anniversary and a Get Well Soon card (Hart, B, n.d, p. 10). Another comedic joke is said as it reveals that Nigel has been sitting in another room for an hour with another patient who he thought was Tommy. Liz leaves the room, leaving Martin and Nigel alone causing awkward tension.
Hannah enters the room, who we know has been struggling to do so for some time. She bears gifts of “Shirt Pillows” that she saw on a TV show called “Queer Eye” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 14). The viewer can tell that Hannah is distraught by this news and is trying her best to cope with it, even if it’s in unhealthy ways such as smoking and drinking. Martin upsets Hannah by saying that mum could not enjoy the gift due to the holes being made in the shirt however completes a smooth recovery, making Hannah happy with her gift again. In this scene, we see that Nigel doesn’t understand people’s emotions or social cues as he abruptly says, “What you could do is hold onto them until your dad does die and then give them out.” Which upsets Hannah again (Hart, B, n.d, p. 16).
Hannah is mysterious as she hides the text, she receives from everyone in the room. Nigel then clears the air by again, not understand social cues and goes onto bring the comedy as he says the last text, he received was from the gym 2 months ago. Hannah, Martin, and Nigel join together for a toast and a drink in the hospital room while Liz isn’t there. Chaos arises when Nigel starts spilling Lager everywhere and sipping it up from the hospital bed and the floor. He even ends up disconnecting a wire from a monitor. Liz returns and is confused and as Nigel storms out in embarrassment, Liz misunderstands the situation and thinks Martin told him about the breakdown.
We’re introduced to another character, Father Sydney, “A nervous looking priest” who is “a shy, shuffling man” (Hart, B, n.d, p. 20). He repeats the actions of Hannah as she entered the hospital, by taking a drag of a cigarette from the same patient as she did. We see in the next couple scenes he’s very stressed and awkward as he points out patients saying that they’re going to die eventually. Liz just ignores it and invites him in, in which he accepts in doubt.
The script ends with them all getting into the Taxi to go to the anniversary party however, Liz stays behind to listen to music with Tommy before she leaves. Martin sees them as he went to pick up his wallet but decided to leave them so they could have a moment together.
I liked that the chosen script was very easily set out, making it more accessible to read as well as all the characters were described with their part and occasionally a description. I would love to involve comedy as well as this script does as well as come up with original and quirky characters which all have their own problems to add to the story.
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References:
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Unwin, P. (n.d). Casualty.
Hart, B. (n.d). Beep. Happy Tramp North Ltd.
Analysis of two dialogue scenes:
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Avengers: Endgame – Action, Adventure, Superhero
Tony Stark & Captain America Argument Scene - Avengers: Endgame Movie CLIP 4K - YouTube
(Avengers: Endgame, 2019)
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The situation in this scene is that the Avengers who weren’t affected by the blip, Thanos’ snap which wiped out half of all living things in the Universe, are discussing the damages and losses of the situation as well as the progress of locating Thanos to Tony Stark, Ironman, who just returned from space, barely making it out alive. Stark is connected to an IV drip and is in a wheelchair due to the lack of food, hydration and sunlight he received while in space. As Natasha Romanoff, Black Widow, explains the current situation, we notice she stutters and is hesitant to carry on the sentence, suggesting that it’s a sensitive topic which even makes an Avenger emotional.
We also notice that despite Rocket Raccoon normally being cocky, argumentative and constantly having high energy, his response to Tony Stark calling him a “Build-a-bear” didn’t startle him, and in fact he accepted it by saying “Maybe I am.". This suggests that due to the sad time and losing his good friend Groot to the blip, Rocket has lost himself.
The dialogue continues as Rogers starts asking Stark if he has any clues such as co-ordinates or locations. Stark disregards his questions in which Rogers becomes impatient and asks him to focus. This starts the climax of the argument. To contrast Steve’s “I need you to focus.”, Tony replies “And I needed you. As in past tense. That trumps what you need. It’s too late, Buddy.”, putting Steve to shame, making him fall silent. This creates tension for the viewer makes them feel distressed as two beloved characters argue with one another and say rude things to one another.
Tony Stark goes onto a speech about how the Avengers work, going on to make Steve feel even more guilty which leads onto the final part of the scene. Stark removes himself from his wheelchair and takes out his IV drip from his arm. He goes onto say to Steve, “I’ve got nothing for you, Cap. Got no co-ordinates, no clues, no strategies, no options, zero, zip nada, no trust. Liar.”, getting quieter and quieter with every word, making it more meaningful. This truly shows Tony’s distress in Steve, someone who was meant to be by his side no matter what. He rips off his arc reactor (technically his heart) and places it in Steve’s hand, symbolising that Steve has ripped his heart out, so he deserves it.
However, we can tell that Tony still cares for Steve as he tells him that if he finds Thanos, that he must put on the arc reactor (which gives him nanotech armour) and he hides, saying that Tony still wants him alive.
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Death Note Relight – Mystery, Police, Psychological
(Symonds, 2013)
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L’s monologue here about monsters represents society and the people around us. However, particularly at the start of his speech he references the characters of the show. He begins his speech with “There are many types of monsters in this world.”, which pulls the viewer in as society see monsters as something supernatural.
His list begins with “Monsters who will not show themselves and who cause trouble.”, referencing to Near, a character within the show who hides his identity as an advantage to get closer to Light. However, this can also reference catfishes and hackers who can ruin people’s lives. The next monster he describes is a monster who “abducts children”, which refers to Mello within the show but refers to kidnappers and offenders. “Monsters who devours dreams.”, refers to Ryuk within the show, yet refers to people who thrive off other’s failures. This line which states “Monsters who suck blood,” refers to Beyond Birthday within Death Note, yet it could refer to murderers around us today as it could be a metaphor for taking another’s blood. The final type of monster in this list is “Monsters who always tell lies” which refers to Light and liars around us. Having this type of monster last in this list allows him to smoothly move on and explain why monsters who always tell lies are the worst.
He describes these monsters in the same structure as he explained the types of monsters, giving the whole monologue a rhythmic theme, making the viewer more interested as it’s easy to follow. He explains that lying monsters are a real nuisance and that they are more cunning than other monsters. “They pose as humans even though they have no understanding of the human heart, they eat even though they’ve never experienced hunger, they study even though they have no interest in academics, they seek friendship even though they don’t know how to love.”, has repetition, keeping the rhythmic flow however, the interesting thing is that L is just describing a normal human, which shows that society is full of all these lying monsters who are all hiding their true identities.
L finishes this monologue by saying “If I were to encounter such a monster, I would likely be eaten by it. Because in truth, I am that monster.”, which reveals L’s true intentions. With his constant fight against Light to restore humanity back into him, he admits with this speech that he does not want justice for the victims. In fact, he doesn’t care about the victims. What he wants is to win, and that’s why he is such a monster. This speech also reminds me of the quote “You are you own worst enemy.”, as this seems as L is self-aware of his actions, yet doesn’t have the emotional capacity to stop them.
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References
Avengers: Endgame. 2019. [Film] Directed by Joe Russo, Anthony Russo. United States: Marvel Studios.
Symonds, P., 2013. L's Monster Speech. [Online]
Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6FHUakRLxCc
[Accessed 2 March 2022].
Three Platforms to Upload My Script:
Script Revolution:
https://www.scriptrevolution.com/
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Script revolution is a free script hosting website for aspiring screenwriters to upload and promote their scripts while also providing filmmakers scripts to look through for upcoming projects. The website is made by a credited working writer-producer named CJ Walley – who also is an author who wrote a guide to screenplay. Script Revolution allows people of all ages to upload their scripts and gain the discovery they need from other screenwriters or filmmakers to have a key to the industry.
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What I like about this website is that it’s accessible to all users, allowing people to filter their search to find the scripts they are exactly looking for, as well as allowing writers to upload their scripts with tags that will get them discovered. Also, despite the website promoting a membership, it’s not needed to use the main site like some other platforms, it just gives you extra benefits. Another thing I like about this website is that it doesn’t have a minimum page requirement and allows screenwriters to upload scripts no matter how short or long the script is.
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Reddit – Produce My Script:
https://www.reddit.com/r/ProduceMyScript/
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The Produce My Script subreddit located on the network named Reddit, allows people to submit scripts, discover scripts for themselves and request scripts. This gives upcoming screenwriters that promotion they need without the paywall stopping their aspirations. This subreddit is setup by screenwriters and people within the community to create a space for screenwriters, directors and producers who want a gateway into the industry a chance.
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What I like about this website is that it’s a friendly community including newcomers and professionals, which diffusers the anxiety of not being good enough. They also criticize your work while also pointing out the positives, leaving a balanced response to improve. The website is easy and accessible to use and understand with the different tags making everything organized. The only negative point is that there is no way to directly upload the script onto the website, so you need to link it externally – for example, through google docs.
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Simply Scripts:
https://www.simplyscripts.com/
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Simply Scripts is a website database for screenwriters to upload their scripts. After submitting a script, it’ll appear in two places to gather discovery. The Discussion Board is the first place, which allows yourself and users to check out scripts for free and allowing them to give their input. It allows screenwriters to gather inspiration and filmmakers to discover their next project. The second place is the Unproduced Scripts tab. This rounds up all the scripts submitted in the last week, allowing users again to find new scripts to read.
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What I like about this website is that it is a close-knit community which allows screenwriters to improve in a positive environment. There are also no fees to submit or read scripts. The negatives in submitting scripts on this website is that stealing work is prone to happen and that the website at first sight can be overwhelming and may be inaccessible to some users.
3 Mind Maps for Ideas:
Idea 1 - The Homicide [DRAMA, MYSTERY, CRIME]
Idea 2 - Horse's Leg [COMEDY]
Idea 3 - The Game [FANTASY, ADVENTURE]
Questionnaire:
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I asked my classmates about my ideas and presented my mind maps asking them to pick the one they wanted to get produced into a script. I recorded my results on a bar graph.
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Here were the results:
As it clearly states, "The Homicide" won the vote. I decided to go ahead with this idea as this was my personal favorite too and the one I had the most ideas for.
Character Profiles:
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Character Profile 1:
Name: Bobby Blake
Nickname (If any): Bobby
Age: 31
Occupation: Detective Investigator
Gender: Male
Ethnicity: White British
Eye colour: Brown
Hair colour: Brown
Clothing: Navy Blue Shirt, Black Trousers
Health: Good
Hobbies: Reading Crime and Mystery Novels
Social Life: Not a major number of friends but can introduce himself confidently to strangers
Quirks: Sarcastic in serious situations
Character Profile 2:
Name: Fred Mann
Nickname (If any): Fred
Age: 52
Occupation: Detective Investigator
Gender: Male
Ethnicity: White British
Eye colour: Blue
Hair colour: Bald
Clothing: Brown Suit, Tweed Jacket, Gloves
Health: Alcoholic, Liver Problems
Hobbies: Golf
Social Life: Outgoing and friendly, lots of people who know him but a small amount of close friends
Quirks: Is very empathetic and sometimes struggles to put his work before emotions
Character Profile 3:
Name: Chris Mann
Nickname (If any): Chris
Age: 19
Occupation: Fast Food Worker (Part Time)
Gender: Male
Ethnicity: White British
Eye colour: Blue
Hair colour: Dirty Blonde
Clothing: Grey dirty tracksuit
Health: Asthma
Hobbies: Gaming
Social Life: Small number of close friends, wasn’t hugely popular in school
Quirks: Pathological Liar
Production:
"The Homicide" Script by Erin Dollin:
This task was to create a 2-3 page script. We could choose the characters, setting and storyline however, it had to be set out in the right way as well as be read in front of the class to practice directing actors for our final project. I chose a scene with 2 detective investigators, Fred and Bobby. They're investigating a murder involving a 27 year old woman named Poppy Myles. Fred is an alcoholic who's very optimistic and friendly towards everyone. Bobby is quite mysterious, humorous and flirty. The twist of the story is that when Fred is investigating the house, they both hear a loud bang come from the bathroom, when they went to check it out, they heard the front door slam. They chase the culprit, eventually catching them, revealing it to be Fred's son, Chris. I done research prior to this to help me write this.
Working with Actors:
This task we had to work with actors to improve our directing skills when it comes to working with actors. I found this task quite hard as I find it hard to criticize others however I learned that good actors will take that criticism and listen to it well and work on it and not throw it back in your face. I believed I could have said more and directed more but overall I believe I done okay for directing actors in this setting for the first time.
Uploading The Script on My Chosen Platform:
The reason why I chose Reddit r/ProduceMyScript was because I felt comfortable posting it in a place with new scriptwriters where I can gather feedback accordingly. I find that there are less expectations for it to be groundbreaking and amazing and also it's very accessible and easy to use. I never gathered any feedback however, I will update if I do.
Evaluation:
Overall, I believe I have tackled and challenged this task effectively and successfully developed and produced a script.
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I believe I could have done better research when analysing the scripts - like explaining more on how places in the script are more emotionally impactful than others - however, I did read through, understand and analyse the scripts productively to a high standard. I think I successfully analysed the dialogue which I selected for the dialogue task and explained what the words they used meant and their significance to the story as well as the context. Furthermore, I explained the word choice's impact and how that develops further in the future. I believe I found the best websites I could for new scriptwriters who don't have a high budget and want to expose their work for free to other people with the same screenwriting interest. They were all useful and accessible websites which may be handy in the future.
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When it came to developing ideas, I developed my idea generating skills as I thought of 3 interesting and unique stories which I expanded in my mind map. I believe I could have included more detail on the third idea, "The Game", however, I still believe it had enough detail for it to be a suitable contestant against the other 2 ideas, "The Homicide" and "Horse's Leg". I also successfully gathered feedback from my target audience, who were older teenagers and young adults, which I was able to receive from my college class due to them all being in that age range. The feedback from my peers was that it was a good script however, there could be more dialogue and less action, in which I agree. I then created character profiles which I thoroughly enjoyed as it made me connect to the character's I created and give them quirky traits which if I were to continue the script, I can include them in - like when they interrogate Chris, have him intentionally lie multiple times.
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In my opinion, I believe I successfully wrote an engrossing and original story which had detail and likeable characters despite the script being so short. I followed the professional conventions in scriptwriting layout to make my script understandable and neat, deciphering the stage directions and description from the dialogue. I agree with my target audience that I could have included more dialogue rather than description however, I also think that the description gives most of the dialogue context, which without it would be confusing and unfinished.
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